literature

Destroyed Trust

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Literature Text

Lies like crushed roses pressed between the pages of your lips.
Watermelon gloss trying to cover up the rottenness of deceit;
Whatever truth you hide spoiled as well.

Don't touch me.

Truth hurts for a moment but lies hurt forever.
Especially ones crushed between the inviting petals of your lips.
The line in my poem was "even as crushing lies make so sweet a bed."
~DontStopTheRain commented "whenever I read the word "crushing" I always think of rose petals."
That made me think of "lies like crushed roses."
And here we are :heart:

It feels to me like this needs something more. Any suggestions? Someone else want to write the next verse? Should I take my poem and stick it? hehe Talk to me!! :love:
WOOOHOOO! Rage stepped up! [link] Anyone else?? :heart:

Edit: check it out what ~Wombat-Pentagram did: [link] :D YAY!
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TheDownpour's avatar
Very good, strong imagery